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"Jack, I said no ball in the hall."
Reminded Jinny with her call

-"But what is it about my ball
that I can’t play with it in the hall?"

Jinny glared at the little clown
"It will turn the hall upside down."

-“Turn upside down? That's a neat trick!
How do you do that? With a kick?"

-"You kick that ball and I'll pull your ear
You can play outside, but never here."

Jinny walked away and left Jack aware
about the ball in the hall, it was no dare.

Jack quickly ran the hall to play outside
but running made his shoelaces untie

He tripped and the ball flew off his hands
It knocked four vases and two table stands

And right after the loud "crash" and "crack"
Jinny came back furious shouting at Jack

'What did I say? Didn't you listen at all?!'
- 'Yes, I did, you said no ball in the hall!'

- 'Then why did you disobeyed me if you knew?'
- ' I didn't! It was the ball, it didn't listen to you.'

The angry Jinny walked over to Jack
whose big, silly head got a smack.
Well, I can't write to save my life, but here I go. I'm not sure if you'd be able
to tell but I'm a HUGE fan of Dr. Seuss' stories and riddles!

Here I finally introduce a character from Jesterday's cast: Jeannette a.k.a. Jinny.
She's a character based off my real life best friend, and I have to say, Jinny and
Jack have the most amusing relationship. Even though Jack messes up sometimes
by accident, he takes advantage of the case and makes Jinny very irritated. Jinny
was the kind of maid that enjoyed her job until Jack came along. While she is strict
she haves her tender side, just make sure you don't do what Jack does to her. u v u
She haves an elder sister that also works as a maid, Lizzette a.k.a. Lizzy, who I'll
illustrate soon, hopefully.

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If anybody can suggest better lines for this silly little poem/story, feel free to do so,
just keep in mind that writing is not my thing-yo. I can't even categorize this...
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PuddingValkyrie Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is a cute poem.  Poor Jack, it wasn't his fault X3
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Joyfool Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013
Hehe, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
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ReonMerryweather Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Professional Writer
"Well, you can rhyme better than me. I always end up inventing words," said I, as I twirred the rocostulating scurr.
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animething7 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you say you cant write but i enjoyed it! :D i thought it was funny
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Joyfool Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
I got it now, LOL thank you very much. XD
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animething7 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
lol no problem :D
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LlikeOaVsinE Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol love it XD
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Joyfool Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Glad you like it! C:
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ShinigamiRyuku Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
very nice
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